Sorry that took me so long. I feel bad...I was so enthusiastic. Anyway, I am going to send the Word file of this to Dr. J to send to the rest of you. I thought we could all make some proposed edits and print out our versions and compare them in class, perhaps.
Octet-subtract-pentacle
pretty outside, inside it wasn't
your name Beatrice.
mellifluous lackadaisical jackrabbits
this burrow leads down radiantly
into an underworld prepared just for you
clouds obscuring the sun fall
of shadows and pausing, giving
a different type of life
daedalus rain hides all
sons in dreary moldy whoredom
commence in sodomic dildo-cleansing dawn
An astral change meets the remorse
Your gestalt names me lethargy,
stares sagely to generate mercury
Nebulous obscuring blackness
orb trembling, bearing
breaking barrenness of being
quietly beasts stare as
alive armatures dance
sunlit dominion accelerates
with woman-wit heal and ache. no enemy
maybe the male mate (once only)
yodel a tryst, an aria--a hot winter ire
nomenclature conveyed of Icarus-enemy
comings past-occurrence (was it not?) comely
Enclosed ceiling-space (it was not)
nectarous procrastinating one
den careens down radiantly
underworld cleaned in preparation
Balance brought by the black of
catastrophic formation of the ancient
East visible in the line
Metamorphic augmentation met trembling Cimmerian
calamity formation moaning timeworn memories
magnetic admonitions marking imagination
No, it's supposed to be "augmentation".
ReplyDeleteI like the edited version so much better! No more bunnies.
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